I agree with your criticism ,Marc.In fact,I knew that the composition had it's weak points,but I wanted to clarify what those were before trying something similar.Thanks.
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Marc Gougenheim{K:5398} 12/4/2002
Light is always nice when looking out through a window. That the capital you have when you start. Then the expression will be important. Here, the expression is gone - profile with the "arm" of the glasses covering the eye. From there onwards you already have a main problem. Finally, I think you have missed an opportunity to capitalize on composition, meaning that the person sits a bit bluntly within the frame. Your composition could have been peaceful for example - using a square format - or could have emphasized the fact that the person was very focussed on something out there - with an horizontal panoramic that would basically follow the direction of her gaze... Composition should add to the message basically, and that isn't happening here.
Technically, the picture is soft as well. Try it again and give maybe simply more thought to the image you want before she comes to pose. Regards.
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